Who sings in the deepest water in the abandoned lagoon?

the deepest water s

I climb my thoughts of you
into skies that are forever
into air that leaves me gasping

Into a dizzy unconsciousness
that transforms itself endlessly
into not me but someone else

Who has grown wings, who floats
on waves that go through me
and drown me and carry me
everywhere all at once—

Who are you? What is this song
that vibrates through my being
and paints all of my surfaces
with continuous magical surprise?

the deepest water close up 1s

Laura at dVerse is highlighting the questions of poet Pablo Neruda, asking us to take one of the selected lines from his work “The Book of Questions” and make it our own.  My poem (which was inspired partly also by Neruda’s love sonnets) is a reworking of one rejected by The Ekphrastic Review for a piece of artwork by Barbara Danin (which you can see here, or by looking at the poems Jane Dougherty posted for Danin’s painting here).

the deepest water close up 3s

The collage is a combination of Danin and Neruda, one of my favorite poets.

20 thoughts on “Who sings in the deepest water in the abandoned lagoon?

  1. a wonderful collage of questions that soar with the collage – the poem ran with Neruda’s questioning so well especially in the last two stanzas. It feels like the narrator is the abandoned lagoon moving between water and air. Thank you for making much of this prompt

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  2. Beautiful collaging of images and words, Kerfe! The opening stanza grabbed me by the throat and left me gasping and the rest of your poem drowned me in wings and waves. I love that you ended with questions, especially:
    ‘…What is this song
    that vibrates through my being
    and paints all of my surfaces
    with continuous magical surprise?’

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