like
a rock
crushing your soul
from
a place
beyond the sky
and
what no
one will tell
spoken,
distilled into
a symbolic language
but
what of
after? what of
the
cosmos surrounded
by the abyss—
My poem, “The Same Old Song”, is among the writing posted today at The Ekphrastic Review in response to Mariano Fortuny’s painting “Fantasy on Faust”, above.
The NaPoWriMo prompt was to write a hay(na)ku, which consists of a three-line stanza, where the first line has one word, the second line has two words, and the third line has three words. I decided to take my poem and condense each stanza creating a new distilled version. The formatting did not translate to the posting on the Ekphrastic Review website, but I think you can see where the stanza breaks should be. Read the original poem here.
This was an excellent exercise for someone like me who tends to wordiness, and I will definitely try it again.
K. 
Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #2: K’s latest #hay(na)ku for #NaPoWriMo2020!
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A provocative and interesting diversion.
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Thanks Jade.
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You are welcome, Kerfe.
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Well done, Kerfe, and congratulations.
Oddly enough, I wrote my hay(na)ku today as a distillation of the poem I had just written for dVerse.
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Thanks Ken. I’m sure I will try this again with other things I’ve written.
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I am just riveted by the third stanza–small, powerful words and perfect line breaks. It does all feel rather soul-crushing…
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Thanks Jennifer. That it does.
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Congratulations, Kerfe! I like this distillation, too–it really gets to the essence with Oracle-like words–those last two stanza–what of after? And the cosmos. . .?
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Thanks Merril. I think it does have the touch of the Oracle as well.
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I like you poem and I loved this – new for me – form as well. But again, it’s your art that is simply mesmerising.
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Thanks. It’s a form I will return to. Both poetry and art!
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