DownBound Train

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Sleeplessness overtook me as it always did.  I wrestled with my twilit mind as it replayed the inner landscapes waiting patiently behind the mask of the day.  Resigned, I drifted out of myself, captive to the mares of night.

No color, no sound.  Everything happens in slow motion, like an old film running through the fading light of a disintegrating projector.  Once again I descend the staircase down, down, down, looking for the elusive station, the place to redeem my ticket to the place I needed to go.  The tracks remained still, empty, silent.  No one left and no one came. On the bare platform my shoes echo like gunshots, reverberating to the pounding of my heart.

Breaking towards the opening on the other end of the platform, I begin to count my steps backwards.

Another weary night tangled into the sheets of dawn.

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Sara at dVerse gives us a line from poet Edward Thomas to use in our 144 word prosery: No one left and no one came on the bare platform.

28 thoughts on “DownBound Train

  1. Excellent & effective use of the prompt line, completely hidden within the marvelous dreamscape you’ve created. I’ve been to that way station; it’s in purgatory.

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  2. Excellent capture of a dream, Kerfe. I like the way you used the cine metaphor, firstly in the film running through the ‘fading light of a disintegrating projector’ and then in the phrase ‘count my steps backwards’, as if winding the film back onto the reel.

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      1. I enjoyed this glimpse into your mind. I tried to think of what my recurring dreams are. One is, I left my purse and suddenly I realize I don’t have it and it’s in a place where anyone could pick it up and take it. The other one is, I go to work but there is nothing for me to do. They’re not firing me, they just don’t need me and they let me know this by excluding me. Both of these dreams really can panic me. Both ridiculous situations and not like your dreamscape. It is beautiful.

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  3. Time to leave a comment. I have been catching up and read a few of your posts. And about them all, I want to say you write so close to the bone. I can literally feel most all of your words. Viscerally. Thank you. 🙏🌎

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