Each script pulses as air on thousand wings–
again seen and written in sky cloud wings
Waves of dark starlings shape great turns,
exhale in wonder as distance disappears on wings
We say “scientists”, but we too fly in awe and delight–
can we track and keep our shape without wings?
But others catch the shifts in murmuration as dark–
we watch as neighbors turn so each can safeguard against wings
Flock of bird script maintains starling shape,
appears as never before in waves, then turns on wings
Sometimes the sky keeps one thin light track–
it is written on pulses–seven shifts seen again again again again again again again—wings
Cave Canem posted a prompt in their Week Four Literary Balms that I’ve been thinking about for awhile:
Prompt #11
Take your favorite poem and use it as a word bank to create a new work. It can be a response to the poem, it can be a remix of the poem, it can be made into a prose poem or have couplets, as long as ALL the words are used.
–Contributed by Cave Canem fellow Teri Ellen Cross Davis.
This morning I read a poem by Sarah Kotchian in Persimmon Tree that resonated, and I made a list of all the words it contained and then started to write. The ghazal form seemed to work best–I used some of the words more than once, but all and only the words in a poem. Just making the list was a revelation, to see the kinds of words she didn’t use, as well as the ones she did. I highly recommend this as an exercise with a poem or poet you like.
Some new and old art, with a poem off prompt for NaPoWriMo Day 24.
What an interesting exercise. And wonderful result. I may give that a try, Kerfe. You’ve inspired me.
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Thanks Diana. Just looking at the list of words made me think about the kinds of words I use in my own writing. Even if you only get that far it’s worth doing.
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I worked on one a little last night. Lots of words! Yikes. 🙂
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Gorgeous ghazal–and artwork. Your starling is alive! 😍💜👏
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Thanks! Birds are a favorite subject of mine. (K)
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Nice multi-media experience, Kerfe.
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Thanks Jade. I’m going to need a rest when April is done! (K)
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Ive grown to love your art
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Thanks Jude. I’m glad!
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Ohh, what a wonderful prompt! I’ll see if I can still use it for NaPoWriMo or I will at a later date. Gorgeous original poem and your re-take.
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Thanks Manga. It is a good promot.
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